his pilgrimage
unquestionably begins
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between mountain range~
lays a valley richly green~
wildlife roaming free
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upon horizon~
atmospheric changes seen~
grey clouds assemble
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adventure awaits~
surrounded by nature’s wild~
tranquil silent peace
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snow capped mountain peaks~
hide steep inclines rocky crags~
dangers of falling
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challenging nature~
belies perilous journey~
mans need to conquer
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never ends
lg/25022021
*Note: I started this for
however I missed the entry date, so it goes. It was indeed hard to write exactly 99 syllables. I find it difficult limiting myself to a specific number of words that can be used. I did succeed with this one but I donβt know if Iβll attempt another any time soon. I have respect for those that can. The traditional mountain music is unique onto itself, steeped in long history. πβπ»π Take care, be safe.
Maybe the urge to conquer is something we have to control better… in the end, we would be more comfortable just enjoying the ride.
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It is a pilgrimage to self discovery, it has many different roads, (some go on a retreat, that was not this mans choice) perhaps I didnβt make it clear that conquering ones own challenges is what I meant.
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My word… Outstanding ππππ
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Thank you for reading and taking time to comment. ππΌπ
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wonderful panoramic sweep calling for adventure π
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Thank you much, John. Glad you enjoyed the read. π
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This is incredibly deep and profound! ππ
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Thank you ππΌ much appreciated. π
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enjoyed your string of haiku … no need to conquer, simply enjoy! Great shot
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Thank you for you time and comment. πππΌ
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welcome, nice to meet you!
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π nice to meet you as well, Kate ~ Elle
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see you around WP Elle
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Self discovery ~~ twisty, complex, difficult, satisfying … makes for quite the journey.
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Indeed it does, for many a lifetime. Thank you for reading and commenting. π
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Just lovely – all of it π€π€
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Thank you dear friend. ππ
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You’re quite welcome π€π€π€
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Fine piece this – full of the journey and the wandering. I particularly liked your concluding line ‘never ends’. I don’t know if you’ve encountered Matsuo Basho in your readings – but his masterpiece – The Narrow Journey to the Deep North – is an epic written on his own pilgrimage. He used (and invented) the form ‘haibun’ where a paragraph of text about the journey/scene was echoed/elaborated by a concluding haiku. It’s a liberating form with much less pernickety syllable counting. (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Matsuo_BashΕ) Thanks also for the Water Tower Bucket Boys – they is some pickers…
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No I havenβt read him, I will be sure to now, youβve piqued my interest. Thank you for reading and your comment. I appreciate any critique of my work, it helps me to improve.
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PS they are indeed bluegrass and mountain music are underrated these days.
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There’s a foreboding a warning tone in the third stanza. But the call to adventure and challenge doesn’t end.
I loved the music!
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No it doesnβt, happy you enjoyed my musical choice. Thank for reading and commenting. ππΌπ
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Bold undertaking, and wonderful result! Well written. The journey was a joy to rake. Love the music video. Something about Portland OR flashed on the screen. I lived in Portland 25years before moving here to Seattle 5 years ago.
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Thank you kindly, for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed the music as well. Have never been to OR, I was going to visit a friend in Seattle last year it never happened because of COVID. Hoping to in the near future if life ever returns to a semi normal state. π
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Well done! And the musical selection adds a matching emotion.
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed the poem and my musical choice. π
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